Roaming Shadow

Thanks for the encouragement! Heck, I'm a bit more of a fantasy person anyway, but I do like Sci-fi so I decided to give it a shot. Bazoo, glad to ...

Okay, I've made some changes to the prologue. First, and likely the most obvious, chapter 1 has changed into a prologue. There are other minor changes and additions in there ...

Gaia, I don't think this site is the place for you. In fact, based on what I've read of your posts, I can't even figure out why you are here. ...

Uh, I don't mean to be rude here, but could you be a bit more specific? Like, perhaps show me where my worst offenses are? And I'm not trying to ...

Crysi, that certainly did please me. I agree with several of your points and will rework it in the near future. Dang, that was an extensive (and very helpful) critique ...